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You have a lot of sources and much material to work with. I don’t fully see where you are going clearly so I might be missing a key point, but as I read it, the topic is too broad. You are going from a small soccer club in Asheville to Barclay’s Premier league soccer. It’s all soccer, but both are separate topics and can be separate papers. For one, Premier league soccer relies heavily on broadcast revenue. So they have incentives to safely conduct games despite added cost of virus remediation. For Asheville soccer club it would seem it’s all additional cost and no incentive, other than members’ desire to get back at it, to get back up and running. My worry is that rather than a coherent paper exploring one topic at the level expected for graduate study, you have 10 pages of jumping from topic-to-topic without in-depth exploration of any of them.

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